Some good observation and analysis of the meaning encoded into this media text. You are picking up on the right stuff which is great. In any case where anyone in authority is shown, comment on that too. You could have highlighted how the boys are seemingly victims of police brutality and racist judges / jury's because you mention how most of the powerful people in this clip are white, it would be good to take that observation a step further and make links to whether we are led to trust those in authority or not. Some good observations in each technical area. What I want you to focus on for exam prep is to take every note from your note-taking in the beginning and shove it into the essay with very pointed / clear and concise thoughts around what it means. This essay is quite long and I doubt you'd get all the points in especially when surrounded by lots of 'chatting' about the themes of the text and what you feel is going on. Make a pointed statement as your opening sentence to a paragraph and fill every line with examples from the text with each of the 4 tech areas, and you'll get maximum marks. Remember DETAILS are important. Shot types, colours, props and costumes etc, try and get it all in!
Great effort though. You're really heading in the right direction :)
Hi Luci
ReplyDeleteOverall Score: 39/50
Terminology: 6/10
Analysis / Argument: 17/20
Explanation / Examples: 16/20
Some good observation and analysis of the meaning encoded into this media text. You are picking up on the right stuff which is great. In any case where anyone in authority is shown, comment on that too. You could have highlighted how the boys are seemingly victims of police brutality and racist judges / jury's because you mention how most of the powerful people in this clip are white, it would be good to take that observation a step further and make links to whether we are led to trust those in authority or not.
Some good observations in each technical area. What I want you to focus on for exam prep is to take every note from your note-taking in the beginning and shove it into the essay with very pointed / clear and concise thoughts around what it means. This essay is quite long and I doubt you'd get all the points in especially when surrounded by lots of 'chatting' about the themes of the text and what you feel is going on. Make a pointed statement as your opening sentence to a paragraph and fill every line with examples from the text with each of the 4 tech areas, and you'll get maximum marks. Remember DETAILS are important. Shot types, colours, props and costumes etc, try and get it all in!
Great effort though. You're really heading in the right direction :)