Three technical elements included: 3/3 Continuity editing: 2/ 2 Clear narrative: 4/5 Title & Credits: 2/2 After Effect included and effective: 3/ 3 Thriller conventions employed: 4/5
Well done on your first edit! And on your first time using after effects!
You have done really great job showing that you understand the conventions that make up the thriller genre. You have given thought and planned for effective lighting and use of props (i.e the blood). Your use of flashbacks as an editing technique was a particularly creative and clever way of telling your story and almost shocking the audience with the sinister reality of what our charming man in the business suit did. I enjoyed your title and the relationship between the visual and the audio that you used. The wind-chime sound effect paired with the title almost 'blowing away' was great! My only suggestions would be to do with sound and narrative. I feel like your sound could have been better. Either turning up the dialogue to be clearer on top of your music or plan for better recording quality. The voices just seemed a little too soft. In terms of narrative and the way you told the story, remember that a thriller is all about suspense and building up to a climactic point in your story. I think to have the ending being the exchange of the envelope, almost brings the audience down off that suspense-high after seeing the images of the blood and realising a murder has been committed. Perhaps it could have been an idea to do the envelope exchange at the start and then to end with the built up suspense of the murder scene? I also enjoyed the jump cuts you used in editing. They made the sequence feel slightly disjointed and pieced the story together cleverly.
Hi Luci
ReplyDeleteOverall Score: 17/20
Three technical elements included: 3/3
Continuity editing: 2/ 2
Clear narrative: 4/5
Title & Credits: 2/2
After Effect included and effective: 3/ 3
Thriller conventions employed: 4/5
Well done on your first edit! And on your first time using after effects!
You have done really great job showing that you understand the conventions that make up the thriller genre. You have given thought and planned for effective lighting and use of props (i.e the blood). Your use of flashbacks as an editing technique was a particularly creative and clever way of telling your story and almost shocking the audience with the sinister reality of what our charming man in the business suit did.
I enjoyed your title and the relationship between the visual and the audio that you used. The wind-chime sound effect paired with the title almost 'blowing away' was great!
My only suggestions would be to do with sound and narrative. I feel like your sound could have been better. Either turning up the dialogue to be clearer on top of your music or plan for better recording quality. The voices just seemed a little too soft.
In terms of narrative and the way you told the story, remember that a thriller is all about suspense and building up to a climactic point in your story. I think to have the ending being the exchange of the envelope, almost brings the audience down off that suspense-high after seeing the images of the blood and realising a murder has been committed. Perhaps it could have been an idea to do the envelope exchange at the start and then to end with the built up suspense of the murder scene?
I also enjoyed the jump cuts you used in editing. They made the sequence feel slightly disjointed and pieced the story together cleverly.
Well done! :)